Blog Post #31 - Updates to my script

 Since this film has a limit of 2 minutes I realized that my script may have to be revised. Based on this limit I decided to shorten my script in order for my opening scene to meet the requirement of 2 minutes. Most of the revisions to my script were removing unnecessary words from sentences and removing unnecessary sentences of dialogue. Doing this brought the word count of my script from 656 words down to 569 words.

In the conversation between D.L and his partner at the start of my film, I removed some sentences from the dialogue and removed some words that I felt were unnecessary for my film. One example of a sentence that I removed when making my updated script was the sentence of D.L saying "Nah not yet we gotta find a good house that will leave us set for a bit." This sentence seemed very unnecessary because instead of including that sentence and the sentence where D.L finds a house I realized that I could just include the sentence of D.L being interested in a house that he could potentially rob.

An example of a removal of words in my script was in the sentence "Oh shoot, there better not be anyone in here I'm never getting caught! I felt that some of these words were unnecessary for this sentence so I revised this sentence to "Oh shoot, I hope no one heard that." This sentence is shorter than the original sentence and I think that this sentence sounds better because it doesn't contain the unnecessary words that the original sentence did. This sentence also still shows the audience the intended reaction that I wanted D.L to express.




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